Thursday, June 14, 2012

KOMF prompt #1

KOMF is a bloghop hosted by Kathy (Imagine Today) and Jessica (Write. Skate. Dream) on the 15th of every month. They came up with it as a way to meet new friends, help build the blogosphere and (hopefully) spark some creativity. So, here's the prompt:

Write a 200 word or less flash fiction beginning with this phrase: Her eyes shot open...

You are free to change the gender and POV if you'd like. 

Oh well, this is the first time I'll be writing any kind of flash fiction, so I know it wouldn't turn out as well as I would like, but I'd still like to participate since I would have something new to learn for myself! :)


Her eyes shot open and air filled her lungs. As she heaved her chest to breathe, she realized she wasn’t alone. She could feel someone lying a few feet away from her head, in that dark, open-air hovel, but she didn’t dare look that way. The horror of what she’d seen before filled her with a sorrow that seemed to seep into her, consuming, and made tiny sobs escape her.

She heard a moan and immediately stopped her whimpers. She didn’t want to move, to make them know that she still lived but she knew she had to escape, and fast. She needed a companion to influence her enough to run. The one behind her seemed like a man, from what she could figure from his voices of pain and heaving breaths, getting louder, trying to get up. Oh no! She couldn’t be lying there, especially with someone nearby who was probably on his feet. She braced all her energy and got up swiftly and turned around to face the most beautiful person she had ever seen! Moonlight made him look utterly, unbelievably gorgeous and she believed him with all her heart when he said,’We need to get out!’


That's it! 200 words! It wasn't very easy for me, since I have a tendency to overuse words, but it was fun! :)
Drop by the hosts' blogs if you're interested in participating, too. The entries close at 11.59 p.m. on the 15th!

18 comments:

  1. OMG....Please tell me Ashna how do you manage to be so active on your blogs :)....
    This post is really good...to be creative and to restrict yourself to just 200 words...phew!!!
    Applause...well done....now Im getting addicted to your blog... :)

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    1. Avina! Keeping to the word count was the hardest part! But I'm glad I tried this.... it's fun! :)

      As for being active, well, it's the vacations at the moment, so I have a lot of time as for now. I don't know what it will be when college starts, though I guess I'll still be active (at least I hope so!) because when there's something you love doing (blogging), you automatically get the time :)

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  2. OMG is right! I love it! I want to know more now! Thanks so much for participating :)

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    1. Thank YOU for the lovely prompt! I enjoyed participating. Thanks so much for saying you like it :)

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  3. Loved it! This is what I call, Ashna-made. :D
    And I guess I see some sort of reality in the above post. ;)

    Keep writing Ashna. Leo says, this bibliophile has a lot to say, every time. :)

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    1. Thanks Leo! :D
      And you sure read between the lines, don't you? ;) I didn't even think about it before your comment! :P

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  4. Very cool! I want to keep reading!

    Thanks so much for participating. :)

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    1. I'm glad you like it! :) Thanks for the prompt!

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  5. That was great. I liked the creepiness and I wonder what they have to run from - something not very nice by the sound of it. I'd like to know what happened next! Stopping by from the bloghop, nice to meet you. :)

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    1. Thank you Nick, nice to meet you too :)
      I actually haven't thought of what would happen next, though if required I guess I would think and write more :)

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  6. The prompt was tempting, sure. But it was your entry that made me took part in it. Simply amazing, and enticing!

    Do share your secret recipe. ;)

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    1. I'm glad you took part! :D

      I sure will share, if you're reading this now, open your FB act and check messages! Important!

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  7. Interesting with just the right level of urgency.
    Who, or what, are they running from, I wonder.

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  8. Great first paragraph I was really immersed in this dark terrifying situation

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    1. I'm glad it captured your attention! Thanks for your kind comment :)

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